Peer Review LB

Writers

  1. State your topic here: Psychiatric Hospitals/Mental Asylums
  2. Bold your thesis statement.
  3. Underline the passages you feel confident about.
  4. Change the color of sections of the text you find troublesome. Ask for specific advice here: The purple part I have trouble on is because I felt like it was a bit too repetitive of the thing and began to stray slightly off the topic.

Reviewers

  • What advice do you have for the writer concerning the passages she or he find troublesome?
  • I think that it was a really good part, and there is really no reason to be worried about it.
  • it was very well worded I have no advice on it.
  • What are the most memorable pieces of writing?

I think the most memorable part about it is how much asylums have changed over the years.
most memorable part was when you dais that the doctors finally realized that the patients where "humans too"

  • Is the introduction effective? How could it be more engaging?

The introduction was pretty good, but i think you should have talked more about how some people imagined asylums.
the introduction pulled I you in right away ut maybe mention a little more about haunted asylums.

  • What questions are you left with after reading this essay?

I think it would be kind of nice to know what happened to asylums and if there are still some around today.
how many asylums there are world wide and what kind of "treatments" did the doctors do in the beginning of the asylums.

  • What does the writer still need to work on?

I think she pretty much talked about everything.
I think I've received enough information

  • What is the essay's greatest strength?

the introduction-it pulls you in right away from the very beginning to the very end.
The essay's greatest strength would have to be when she was explaining what they kind of were.

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